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Example SrA Below the Zone (BTZ) Additional Justification









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ADDITIONAL JUSTIFICATION
BELOW-THE-ZONE
MAY 2005


NOMINNE:


- #1 pick of 15 peers for special deployment to Combined Air Operations Center (CAOC)
  -- Ran 25,000+ feet of fiber optic networking cable; enabled 850 new network drops
  -- Worked 48 hours to reorganize CAOC network cables reducing cable traffic by 10%
- Installed redundant switches in CAOC and Intel buildings; ensured network availability
- Developed technical solutions for constantly changing theater network requirements
  -- Directly involved with implementation of most efficient network design topology
- Installed new fiber path/switch supporting Intelligence Cell’s AccessNet radio system
- Authored section network repair guide; reduced network troubleshooting time by 20%
- Organized element’s section of unit warehouse; increased storage space by 4,900 sq ft
- Completed 35 hours of computer-based training towards the CISCO Network Associate
  Certification; enhanced skills to maintain highest mission-readiness abilities.
- Active part of a 15 member team in support of Sumter Habitat for Humanity
  -- Donated ten hours of labor, saving recipients of home $82,000 in new home costs
- Volunteered 6 hours during the annual Cherryvale Elementary School field day
  -- Supervised/mentored 520 students on sportsmanship and teamwork over 14 events
 

Reminder, the closing line is 5 spaces below the last line of text.

 Note:

  This package didn't win.  Although this is a good package, the package didn't have a strong enough leadership flavor.  Still, it illustrated the whole person concept and touched on education and volunteerism. The hard part in really understanding the package maybe left in the EPR.  Without that, this only shows half of the full package.


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